Many of you have parenthesis as your writing target this week.
For today’s SPAG, I would like you to complete the activity that I have set on spag.com.
This will allow me to see if there are any questions that confuse you and I will go over these tomorrow. Please complete by this afternoon so that I can do this.
If you have forgotten your log-in, just message me on Dojo and I’ll send it across.
LI: I can improve a persuasive text
We look to persuade people every day when we want them to do something. An example of this is an estate agent; they want people to buy houses and so use lots of persuasive techniques to show them that the house is perfect for their needs!
I have a letter today from an estate agent.
The letter has some issues. Firstly, it is missing some words and secondly, it isn’t very cohesive or persuasive yet!
I would like you to rewrite the following passage about the dodgy-looking house to get people to see its potential. Fill in the missing gaps and extend the sentences. You will need to re-write the passage, not just print off to complete as you will not be able to fit enough editing in.
While doing this, make sure you include the following:
Below are also some really useful phrases for a persuasive text.
I will model the first sentence for you.
It currently says…
A ___________ opportunity to buy this ________ house.
I am going to look to use some exaggerated words for the gaps and use a fronted adverbial. I am also going to pretend that parenthesis is my target…
Just for you, this is a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity (it is only on sale for one week) to buy this unique house.
Hopefully you can see here how I have improved this sentence to a Year 6 standard. Off you go. You could start by copying my first sentence, or using your own ideas. Then continue with the rest of the passage.